It is sometimes suggested that primary schoolchildren should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals.
Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Education plays a crucial role to develop the society nowadays. There is a variety of ways to edify people such as tell a story, go for a trip, go to school,... Some people say that initial students should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animal. In my viewpoint, this would bring more advantages to children.
Mostly, teaching children how to grow vegetables and keep animals are one of the best ways to educate them. When we teach them how to plant vegetables, trees, fruits,...Not only do they learn about the general knowledge of the vegetable which they are planting and the plant skills, but they also learn about the significant meaning of planting, those are patient and responsibility. For instance, if they schoolchildren want to harvest bean seeds, they have to plant it and wait; during that time, they also have to take care of the bean trees because if they ignore of taking care the trees, the trees would die and they could not harvest bean seeds. Secondly, when we teach schoolchildren how to keep animal which suitable for children to keep like pets, they would understand the significance of having pets. Children would recognize that pets should be treated gently and equally like human; playing with pets could also makes children decrease their stress. Finally, children would love other people like the way they love their pets.
Nevertheless, children should assume the acquaintances of Math, Science or Social. For example, the operation, current events about the society…because those are all the fundamental things that they should know before they attend high school and get an occupation. In my opinion, the best solution to edify children is let them learn those main subjects and learn how to plant vegetables, keep pets simultaneously.
In conclusion, showing children how to grow vegetables and keep animals would bring more advantages. But they have to learn about the main subjects in school because those are also Important to them at all.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06079027356 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71542401684 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501519756839 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1193775564 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192599301077 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831086420733 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082000237254 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141152998745 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284111485096 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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