Being a celebrity-such as film star or sports personality-brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
Becoming a famous star requires too much time to practice and work hard ; however , the results are really deserving of their efforts and sometimes you can get huge privileges than you expected . Therefore, so many young people wish to become a celebrity , especially an idol or an actor / actress in recent years. Being a celebrity brings many pros as well as cons. I believe that this has more advantages than disadvantages.
When you are a celebrity , you have to face up with several problems. Firstly, to become an artist , you are forced to experience a tough time to practice and work under pressure within 15-18 hours a day. It is so stressful that some people gave up becoming a well-known person. In addition, after becoming more famous, you lack of privacy. Wherever a celebrity appears not only on stage but also in reality, they become the center of attention and also a hot topic on social media. It's too easy for both fans and haters to follow, explore,and share a piece of their life in public without their permission. Netizens, heavy stalkers, paparazzi … are the culprit that leads to the concerns. They have affected the life of many celebrities by posting their phone numbers, addresses,relationship.… For instance, nowadays, a Vietnamese singer, whose name is Jack , is criticized for his bad behaviours and irresponsibilities. In the past, he was a famous singer attracting many fans; however, when the scandal occurred his career was damaged and collapsed. Another disadvantage of being well-known is that you don't spend too much time with family like a normal person because of the busy work. Therefore, it will form the long distance relationship for each other.
In spite of the drawbacks mentioned above, I believe that there are many more advantage to being a celeb. One of the great advantages of fame is that there is a lot of abundant opportunity for wealth. Many brands, shops, and events hire well-known people to present products to the public , then they are paid a huge amount of money. According to the news, Lisa of Blackpink earned 2 million US dollars for only one advertisement. In sports, football players such as Quang Hai, Cong Phuong.. can be paid more 100 million in Vietnam for their goals. After retiring from their job, they can try to do some jobs like vloggers, youtubers ... Another positive aspect is that you can receive dominance and special privileges rather than mediocre people. For example, many people admire, respect them and their statues, pictures are shown in the gallery, museum....
In conclusion, it seems to me the benefits of being a famous and successful celebrity are more considerable than its troubles.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, really, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2235.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 447.0 315.596192385 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91267403256 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58389261745 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8161838561 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.88 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.48 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224791900808 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628680700702 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758922341712 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163406676949 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571485118999 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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