In Britain when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them Sometimes the government has to pay for this care Many people say family shoud pay rather than government How far do you agree

Essay topics:

In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with
other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes
the government has to pay for this care.
Many people say family shoud pay rather than government.
How far do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The trend of living in old age homes is becoming common where old people are taken care by the hired nurses. This care is funded by the law makers in many countries .Even though many would believe it to be family's primary duty to pay for this service, I assert , government must take a charge of this.

Primarily, it should be the law makers' fundamental duty that they need to reciprocate financially and by any other possible means to pay off grey-haired people who have served their country throughout their lives. This means that by being productive members of the society, the dedication and hard work contributed to make country better and developed. Hence, the higher authorities owe these aged people to financial subsidize for the taxes and services they gave at their young age by paying Provident fund, GST tax on items they buy many other and things. The repayment by governments to these old people can be done by giving them medical insurance, senior citizen card to get any basic services ranging from day to day grocery shopping, monthly electricity bill, and transportation cost either at free of cost or at very economical prices if possible.

In contrast, some people might think that governments generally have plethora of responsibilities on their shoulders already than focusing merely on subsidizing golden age people. Since many governments strive to make sure to fund infrastructure, general public health services, educational fields and so forth, it tends to become a job of other family members now .To elaborate, older people generally save money or property for their later age which their family members keep , so these close family people must be made liable to pay any expenses made on looking after their old people. Let alone this practical and financial aspect, even, on the basis of moral values and humanitarian grounds, family members ought to pay for the care of old people.

In conclusion, despite having a view of one school of thoughts which make it obligation for families to pay for their old ones, I firmly have a perspective that it is an utmost job of any government to give funding for a take-care of their old citizens than leaving it on their families.

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Average: 7.8 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ovident fund, GST tax on items they buy many other and things. The repayment by government...
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...and things. The repayment by governments to these old people can be done by givin...
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...tation cost either at free of cost or at very economical prices if possible. I...
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...ubsidizing golden age people. Since many governments strive to make sure to fund ...
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... a perspective that it is an utmost job of any government to give funding for a...
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...t job of any government to give funding for a take-care of their old citizens t...
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...ment to give funding for a take-care of their old citizens than leaving it on th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, so, in conclusion, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94086021505 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6962161689 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569892473118 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.2975951904 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.3890508203 49.4020404114 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 183.8 106.682146367 172% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.2 20.7667163134 179% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322442579343 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135359021721 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059219608828 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218117871131 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562417607916 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 13.0946893788 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.3001002004 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.1190380762 166% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 165, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...nded by the law makers in many countries .Even though many would believe it to be ...
^^
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Even
...ed by the law makers in many countries .Even though many would believe it to be fami...
^^^^
Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...y duty to pay for this service, I assert , government must take a charge of this. ...
^^
Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Primarily, it should be the law makers fundamental duty that they need to recip...
^^
Line 3, column 538, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun other seems to be countable; consider using: 'many others'.
Suggestion: many others
...ovident fund, GST tax on items they buy many other and things. The repayment by government...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 589, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and things. The repayment by governments to these old people can be done by givin...
^^
Line 3, column 823, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tation cost either at free of cost or at very economical prices if possible. I...
^^
Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ubsidizing golden age people. Since many governments strive to make sure to fund ...
^^
Line 5, column 249, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ve to make sure to fund infrastructure, general public health services, educational fields and...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...become a job of other family members now .To elaborate, older people generally sav...
^^
Line 5, column 368, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...come a job of other family members now .To elaborate, older people generally save ...
^^
Line 5, column 479, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ater age which their family members keep , so these close family people must be m...
^^
Line 5, column 518, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...p , so these close family people must be made liable to pay any expenses made on ...
^^
Line 7, column 23, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of old people. In conclusion, despite having a view of one school of thoughts ...
^^
Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ts which make it obligation for families to pay for their old ones, I firmly have...
^^
Line 7, column 169, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., I firmly have a perspective that it is an utmost job of any government to give...
^^
Line 7, column 184, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a perspective that it is an utmost job of any government to give funding for a...
^^
Line 7, column 219, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t job of any government to give funding for a take-care of their old citizens t...
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Line 7, column 239, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ment to give funding for a take-care of their old citizens than leaving it on th...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, so, in conclusion, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94086021505 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6962161689 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569892473118 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.2975951904 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.3890508203 49.4020404114 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 183.8 106.682146367 172% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.2 20.7667163134 179% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322442579343 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135359021721 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059219608828 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218117871131 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562417607916 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 13.0946893788 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.3001002004 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.1190380762 166% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.