The habit of people overconsuming things like food, buying too many clothes and travelling and spending too much must be lowered down by people, otherwise society will be unsustainable, having a very less number of resources and planet will suffer.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement ?
Undeniably, most people consume more and more whether it is spending too much money and time for travelling or hoarding clothes, or buying a lot of home appliances and so forth. By witnessing this incessant incline in the consumption, it is suggested by many that people must lower their consuming habits to save the planet, to make society sustainable and to save planet's crucial resources. In my opinion, I completely agree with this idea due to the following reasons.
Firstly, it is needless to say that for saving the planet, one should exhaust various resources in limit; otherwise all the resources will get diminished soon due to this trend of over-consuming everything. Since there is a dramatic population explosion since last one century, it is already very difficult for governments of many nations to fulfill the many basic needs of the people. For example, When people travel voraciously then they use more and transportation which increases the pollution. Similarly, when people do spend exorbitantly for shopping, they end up collecting many clothes which they might not even wear or throw later. For making these clothes, a lot of resources like water, electricity and water are used in factories and these natural resources are already in dearth. What is more, it would be imprudent to ignore the fact that people eating too much food leads to get many health problems like obesity, food poisoning and so on. Even, people in the greed of eating excessively waste food which could have been eaten by somebody suffering from the starvation. Therefore, the habit of consuming in an uncontrolled manner can disrupt the sustainability of human society and hamper the growth of planet.
In contrast, some people might think that advancements in technology and science have made it possible now to fulfill any increasing demand of the world whether it is of food or of clothes, of products like home appliances or even. To illustrate, improvements in fertilizers and crop systems have given us manifold yields of the crops schemes like Green Revolution. Adding up, alternative ecofriendly resources to generate electricity like cng, wind power and many others are with us now to save environment and fasten up the process of manufacturing to meet the increasing demands of the people and industries. Therefore, one can over consume and still earth, its resources and human society can sustain.
In conclusion, it is clear that people around the world should definitely decrease their over consumption of various things to make the word better place to live and to make it survive even in future because excess of everything is bad.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1121, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an uncontrolled manner" with adverb for "uncontrolled"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, similarly, so, still, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, in my opinion, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2220.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11520737327 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84589356716 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55069124424 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.6072071377 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.75 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.125 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305500582141 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845638654519 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512059215025 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156329071017 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824091835286 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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