Buying things on the Internet such as books air tickets and groceries is becoming more and more popular Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages

Essay topics:

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular.

Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Online shopping is increasingly well-known due to some benefits. However, the demerits are more severe because plethora of consumers mostly suffer from seller frauds and cyber-crimes.
To commence with, purchasing goods in e-commerce is because of easy access to receive those without going out to physic shop. Nevertheless, this has a detrimental impact due to the fact that buyers will be cheated by the merchants in some internet-shopping applications, the stuffs they buying are not original. For example, Indonesians purchase IELTS books in Tokopedia, ordering those effortlessly with one-clicking only, the sellers guarantee those are not imitation possessing high printed quality. When the this such literatures have delivered, then those are checked, the writing is blurred, and this means that it is categorized as such a scam.
Moreover, surfing in online store to buy some stuffs has a tendency to be cheaper in order to claiming some discount vouchers. Nonetheless, people registering an account in e-commerce witness data hacking, that is why it provide more severe effects. For instance, Traveloka offers discount to the users monthly, claiming voucher to reserve costless flight to travel abroad. In 2020, this huge internet-based travel agent was hacked because of the security system unmaintained, and the millions of accounts were crawled, and some of the users’ data had been identified to be sold by the hackers in deep-web.
In conclusion, the Internet-based purchasing reveals more drawbacks than the merits, witnessing the data crawling and merchants’ fraud. If consumers desire to avoid the negative influences, they shall have a high awareness prior to buying the things virtually, and do real-time check their own account.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...n possessing high printed quality. When the this such literatures have delivered, then t...
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Line 4, column 221, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...ce witness data hacking, that is why it provide more severe effects. For instance, Trav...
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Line 4, column 524, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... millions of accounts were crawled, and some of the users’ data had been identified to be s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54275092937 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06390524891 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639405204461 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9559954661 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.25 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4166666667 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176914178576 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576432135266 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351941558414 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0992407849257 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291031028187 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.36 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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