The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-yearperiod.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.You should write at least 150 words.

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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year

period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main

features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of visitors to Australia and Germany from 1960 to 2010.

Overall, in both countries, most of the tourists came from Europe in 1960 whereas in 2010,Germany continued to attract most the European visitors while Australia had Asians being the most popular tourists in the same year.

In Australia, most of the visitors were from Europe and it accounted for just over half of the tourist in 1960 although in 2010 ,Asia brought the largest proportion of tourists which was over two fifths of the total percentage of visitors and this happened to be six times the number of visitors that came in 1960.

In Germany, the greatest proportion of tourists came from Europe for both 1960 and 2010 with 45% and 40% respectively, although there was a 5% drop in the percentage of visitors during the same period. The percentage of visitors from Britain were the least with 6% which was a decline of more than three times from 1960.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 3.0 24.0651302605 12% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 811.0 1615.20841683 50% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 166.0 315.596192385 53% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88554216867 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 4.20363070211 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53690999525 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 176.041082164 46% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487951807229 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 228.6 506.74238477 45% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.3213891603 49.4020404114 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.2 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2 20.7667163134 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0291641512984 0.244688304435 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0201972053538 0.084324248473 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0177375391671 0.0667982634062 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0226514761959 0.151304729494 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0171082178173 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 78.4519038076 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 9.78957915832 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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