Over the last couple of decades, childhood obesity is raising at an alarming rate and become a burning issue in many industrialized countries. One school of society recons that advertisements of fast foods and snacks should be banned inside the school and collage premises. In my perspective, it will be a complete failure and will not provide any use too tackle this situation of obesity among teenagers.
To begin with, the first and foremost reason for my disagreement is that banning adverts will be worthless as children will continue to see these alluring items outside the institute`s building. They could watch ads about these items on many other platforms like TV, roadside hoarding, internet etc, and get attracted to buy these unhealthy eatables. For example, in a survey in Great Britain, two-third of children admitted that they went to to buy those sugary snacks and sweets by watching their ads on the television or on social media sites.
On the other hand, proponents of this policy claims that banning advertises from schools and colleges will be an appropriate solution. They claim that due to it, students will start eating home cooked food and consequently improve their health. However, a report show that this would have minimal impact and will hardly influence their choices. Instead, raising awareness among them will be much beneficial and had a significantly affected their options of food.
To conclude, since children are exposed to many other means of advertisements and banning adverts in educational buildings have a negligible effect on children behavior towards eatables, prohibiting advertisements will be meaningless and have no value to mitigate childhood obesity levels.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, so, third, for example, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3125 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88636191415 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632352941176 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4547817861 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.363636364 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7272727273 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.18181818182 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178222912041 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692256722239 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437960452391 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107005026531 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524168609138 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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