These days, obesity has become an urgent problem occurring at adolescence stage. In this essay, I will analyse the major causes, effects of this trend and suggest some solutions.
First, the main factor causes the spreading of obesity among children is disorderly consumption for junk food and sugary soft drinks, these things contain higher fat, sugar and calories which lead children to the risk of many diseases such as diabetes, heart attack or even cancer. Second, youngster tend to have a sedentary lifestyle when they spend almost their spare time to use computer or portable gadgets as well as lacking of exercise and physical activities. This habit contributes to potential obesity when the harmful substances were mentioned above like saturated fat and sugar, they gradually accumulate in their bodies instead of being burned and transformed to energy by outdoor activities. Furthermore, obesity can have negative impacts on social connections of children. They have a tendency of feeling more social anxiety because of their appearance. According to The Guardian's Survey recently, the population targeting 657 female high school students. The overweight group is 10.03% and the dissatisfaction rate of appearance is 69.71% in the same group.
On the other hand, government, schools and parents have responsibilities for diminishing the negative effects of obesity in society. There are some beneficial solutions that they could take to tackle it. Primarily, the government should impose additional taxes on unhealthy, less nutritious food and enforce putting nutrition label on these products. This intention is to intimidate consumer so that they can able to consider buying these foods. Secondly, the headmasters and parents can fix an eating disorder by banning selling food in campus schools, and instead of using fried food, they can use other methods of cooking like boiling, steaming and raise rate of vegetables in food rations. Finally, parents have to restrict the time children spend on computers and combine with teachers to encourage them to take up sports or regular exercise by celebrating extracurricular activities which full of enjoyments. For example, structuring hiking, swimming, or biking at weekend.
In conclusion, although obesity is a serious problem for youngster, we could reduce it by changing children lifestyle. This requires remain active most of the time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
These days, obesity has become a urgent problem occurring at adolescence...
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Line 5, column 434, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this food' or 'these foods'?
Suggestion: this food; these foods
...o that they can able to consider buying these food. Secondly, the headmasters and parents ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49326145553 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85129340699 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636118598383 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.3110941897 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.222222222 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6111111111 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172790996048 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513647060022 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671849607196 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145421062423 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108993594294 0.056905535591 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 78.4519038076 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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