Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

Essay topics:

Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In this society, there are various levels of living condition, which brings about children having differences in many aspects, such as finance, medication, health, and especially education. Some people maintain that children suffering from poverty have the ability to solve issues in real life more efficient than those are wealthy. This essay sets out to strongly advocate this statement.

Because of the supports from their family, affluent children tend to own mostly everythings since they was borned. This means they don’t need to put lots of efforts on achieving the target, which causes a bad habit and negative influence to them. Therefore, when they grow-up, these people will have cutureal shocks of the reality, and how harsh people are in the society. One illustration for this case is that research has shown that approximately 74% of start-ups having good family background failed.

On the other hand, poor children usually have been educated strictly from their parents at a young age. The reason for this mainly because they have been through many bad situation and lacked money; additionally, the family desire a better life and a bright future for their children. These children are familiar with those negative aspects of life, and also with the expectation from parents, they are able to break barriers and challenges arising from proverty. Lots of people who have a bad background, have became standards of success, such as Thomas Edison.

In conclusion, This essay showed a high agreement that because of having trained and being used to the reality of life, poor children seem to be better at facing and solving problems comparing to the wealthy one.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 34, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[7]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have usually been
...ed. On the other hand, poor children usually have been educated strictly from their parents at...
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Line 5, column 512, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
... people who have a bad background, have became standards of success, such as Thomas Ed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20220588235 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51672336942 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610294117647 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6447697718 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.916666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242406745476 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847469092831 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367641428167 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144415867684 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332930479919 0.056905535591 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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