Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
There is a big controversy surrounding competitiveness in most societies. Although there are some demerits of competitiveness, I would argue there are far more merits and in this essay I will support my idea with examples.
The main downsides of the trend towards competitiveness brings people a lot of pressure. This means individuals are usually depressed by their work, which they need to promote every day. Moreover, various people cut down their period of sleep to exceed their colleagues. It leads to an ever-increasing number of people who have some psychological diseases in their mind. Taking Holland as an example, there are more and more people who are in a heavy depression in their mind because they are put a lot of pressure on their shoulders.
Despite some negatives I mentioned above, I believe that competitiveness is a positive development for various reasons. Firstly, competitiveness levels up the society day by day. Because without competitiveness, there are not numerous inventions which were released in the past. For example, Apple always updates their advances yearly because they have to keep their customer source. Secondly, competitiveness, in the Internet era, is necessary to let people enhance their knowledge. Most people do not want to leave behind so they need to catch up with any news to compete with other people. Applying news into their mind not only exceeds any people surrounding them but also helps them improve themselves.
In conclusion, while there are a plethora of detrimental effects on this issue, I strongly support that if people live in the world without competitiveness, people can not develop as nowadays.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24344569288 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15684350284 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580524344569 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.5711516368 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3333333333 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217352474005 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718681019367 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673619257523 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124399792366 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520577229199 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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