Computer technologies are more accessible and cheaper, as the result, more adults work at home and children study at home. Is this a positive or negative development?
As computer technologies are integrated into almost every device nowadays, we are struggling to keep them out of our everyday life during activities such as studying and working, that are now easy and cheap tasks to complete from home. Computers have simplified life for almost everyone, but I believe that this development has a number of important drawbacks, especially when considering people's physical and mental health.
Firstly, while telecommuting enables employees to work from home and students to be home-schooled, it isolates people from others. Especially for young children, human interaction is important to develop their communicating skills, and school plays an important role in this, but when kids study at home in front of a computer, the possibility of interactions disappears. They will only learn to communicate through electronic devices, instead of talking face-to-face with their peers. The same can happen to adults who work from home, where they do not have to face their colleagues and employer every day. In a person who is already shy or finds it difficult to interact with other people, spending too much time in front of a screen can be very isolating.
Secondly, when people sit at their desk for long periods of time, many days per week, it prepares the ground for an unhealthy lifestyle. Many pieces of research underline the importance of engaging in any kind of physical activity during the day to prevent the early onset of diseases such as obesity and diabetes. For this reason, using computer technology for long periods of time should never be recommended to anyone, especially to young people who, instead, should spend most of their time leading an active lifestyle.
In conclusion, I believe that while telecommuting has many benefits as it helps save time and money, on the other hand, it has to be considered a fairly dangerous development for everyone's health. People who decide to include such technologies into their everyday life should always be able to balance it with more active tasks.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, as to, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15963855422 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83209903552 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590361445783 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.7456138101 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.75 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187616128465 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654501062751 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536934910284 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105376510756 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476412546208 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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