Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Countries' resemblance now is becoming more alike to one another. This phenomenon is geared by universal-market activities. The distance-market barrier has already disappeared, and people can easily buy neighbors' product without an export label. Thanks to online marketing that mobilize countries investors sell goods without place them first to the country target. This minimizes the spreading global market into one place like a traditional market, only it placed in virtual worlds. The going activities of buying and selling turn country consumer's identities much more resemble country investor. It can be judged positively despite many drawbacks have to be compromised.
Historically, many developments have been helped by the existing global market. It promotes developed regions to gain advanced technology that they may not reach it by their own technology capacity. Africa, for many decades, has been suffered to get clean mineral water. Their people always need to walk a number of miles to seek sustainable edible water. Because of this, their government shops their budget to buy dreamed technology that can dig and seek clean water and can deliver it to an impossible area, so the poor family does not need to walk anymore. This market gives a positive impact to Abu Dhabi, the famous giant and advances Arabian country. Its development has already been known successful due to reshaped remote sand country becomes the well-known advanced country. They build an enormous giant tallest building, Burj al-Khalifa, and structure the water system that runs trough all lands, so the brown lands become greens. The changes do not stop into that, The majority of people spend their money on buying expensive cars, and luxurious jewel. This undoubtedly reshapes eastern Arabian country into more western.
I admittedly aware those facts but global marketing change our future separated nations becomes more unity and countries identities will lose. Many liberal people may say that is development but I argue that. The countries' identities are very essential, without that the future generation may lose their pillar to straighten their belief. The nation ideology may suffer from losing and their spirit to compete may be endangered, so Olympic champion will stay only in history. Therefore, I believe country will someday become weaker due to global market intensively overwhelm customers to afford a product that does not represent local culture. Kebaya, Javanese-female dress, now is used only for ceremony instead of casual dressing, and Javanese female all are imposed by western dressing. So that impacts to youth generation, swag cloth becomes more appealing by some group of Indonesian teenagers, then they action resemble American Urban teenagers.
Above all, The global market only gives positive to outer development, but it may disrupt the mental of consumers. Therefore, the education about how the culture could be disrupted by global market should be conducted, so the young generation may not be contaminated by neighbor's custom.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ot be contaminated by neighbors custom.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, then, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2581.0 1615.20841683 160% => OK
No of words: 474.0 315.596192385 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44514767932 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74671310337 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 176.041082164 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586497890295 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 815.4 506.74238477 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 16.0721442886 162% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8034468232 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2692307692 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2307692308 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.76923076923 7.06120827912 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212542540495 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618586467534 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506652821711 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121467136809 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655210986329 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 152.0 78.4519038076 194% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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