In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
it is undeniable that the increasing rate of unemployment is one of the most pressing issues in some countries, which leads to the decision that not offering highe education after primary level to pupils,especially who do no have ability to find a job.
First of all, i believe that the increasing in the number of employees is undoubtedly difficult situation for the government,which is a result of population expolosion and companies cannot provide enough jobs for people especially recnetly graduated students.Therefore, companies require people who are well-prepared with skills, knowledge and approriate certification which can only be acquired in beyond primary education. In other words, the government should given secondary education to everyone to expand opportunities to apply for jobs, also reduces the rate of unemployment.
Secondly, there are remarkable benefits that secondary education can bring to our life. I suppose that providing children with higher education after primary level when they already have an awreness about their future not simply help them to achieve higher certification,but to learn important skills such as critical thinking or team-working.There are many students who have noticeably improved their skills which is important for their future career, also it helps them be able to catch up with many advanced technology equipments in workplace.For example, people with certification can have more opportunities to have well-salary jobs than undergraduates.
In conclusion, although the rate of unemployment in some countries is unstable due to the overpuplation and the lack of knowledge, all children should be eductaed and given opportunities to study higher education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i suppose, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71484375 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.48887173054 2.80592935109 124% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58984375 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 20.2975951904 207% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 164.518911442 49.4020404114 333% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 243.833333333 106.682146367 229% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 42.6666666667 20.7667163134 205% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 22.8333333333 7.06120827912 323% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232054978272 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119563164034 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871985156611 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148862067872 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0954417661984 0.056905535591 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.8 13.0946893788 205% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.93 50.2224549098 24% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 11.3001002004 195% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.73 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.04 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.5 9.78957915832 332% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.1190380762 186% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 10.7795591182 250% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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