Diagram

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Diagram

The diagram describes changes at Queen Mary hospital since 1960. As shown in 1960 hospital was build close to the Main road. On the left hand side of the hospital was a Shopping centre . Area behind hospital was used as a car park, while the area behind shopping centre was a farmland.
The differences can be seen in 1980, when shopping centre was demolished. Instead of shopping centre there was a Cancer centre. Farmland was turned into a Nursery school. Hospital and car park stayed at the same place, only difference was that hospital now consisted a pharmacy on the left hand side. In 2000, cancer centre was turned into bigger and it was I L shape. Hospital and Pharmacy stayed exactly the same as they been in 1980.
But , as they made a Cancer centre bigger,car park and nursery needed to be smaller.
In general, through this period of years, Hospital remained the same , adding Cancer centre and a Nursery school. Biggest difference was seen at car park that went dramatically smaller.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The diagram describes changes at Queen M...
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Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nges at Queen Mary hospital since 1960. As shown in 1960 hospital was build close ...
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Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...de of the hospital was a Shopping centre . Area behind hospital was used as a car ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ehind shopping centre was a farmland. The differences can be seen in 1980, whe...
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Line 2, column 368, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ntre was turned into bigger and it was I L shape. Hospital and Pharmacy stayed ex...
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Line 2, column 433, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'was', 'were'?
Suggestion: was; were
...harmacy stayed exactly the same as they been in 1980. But , as they made a C...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...exactly the same as they been in 1980. But , as they made a Cancer centre bigge...
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Line 3, column 11, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e same as they been in 1980. But , as they made a Cancer centre bigger,car...
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Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , car
...ut , as they made a Cancer centre bigger,car park and nursery needed to be smaller. ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ark and nursery needed to be smaller. In general, through this period of years...
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Line 4, column 75, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...iod of years, Hospital remained the same , adding Cancer centre and a Nursery scho...
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Line 4, column 121, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ' the Biggest'.
Suggestion: The Biggest
...ing Cancer centre and a Nursery school. Biggest difference was seen at car park that we...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, while, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 24.0651302605 29% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 824.0 1615.20841683 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 173.0 315.596192385 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76300578035 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 4.20363070211 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41933392753 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 176.041082164 51% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520231213873 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 244.8 506.74238477 48% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.6077411835 49.4020404114 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 63.3846153846 106.682146367 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.3076923077 20.7667163134 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 7.06120827912 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0337854775855 0.244688304435 14% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.018765825 0.084324248473 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650067246919 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.021035263527 0.151304729494 14% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364341451793 0.056905535591 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 13.0946893788 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 50.2224549098 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 11.3001002004 53% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.44 12.4159519038 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 78.4519038076 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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