People have different views about whether or not video games have positive effect on children. Although I accept that some educational games can cause to create useful skills, I believe that there are some drawbacks of them.
There are several reasons why I believe children can take benefits from video games. The first reason is that video games are usually produced by taking into account the age range of users. Children's games mainly target to teach them useful skills, such as learning the alphabet or calculating. For example, the game named "The Animal World" could instruct my six-year-old nephew how to calculate easily and quickly. As it has differently animated and numbered animals, not only children are interested in the games but also start analyzing the number of participated characters. The second reason, various puzzle games that require logical thinking are also responsible to shape problem-solving qualities in young users.
On the other hand, many people believe that computer games might influence children detrimentally. Firstly, with the attractive feature, video games hold children in front of a computer screen longer than recommended hours. It causes them to have less sleep, and they become passive at school lessons on the following day. Acquisition of subjects decreases as a result. Secondly, inactive video games lead children to have some obesity problems. Finally, as these games are solitary activities, children are isolated, and they become less sociable later.
In conclusion, in order to bring up decent citizens, parents should control children's spare time and guide them to have successful prospects in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: creating
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46153846154 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69125254049 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7818736818 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6666666667 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198817463438 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667978040456 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320595112726 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117923686029 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214713271678 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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