During holidays or weekends, young people spend less time on outdoor activities in the natural environment, such as hiking and mountain climbing. Why? What can be done to encourage them to go out ?
In the 21st century, it is phenomenon that the large number of younger are unwilling to pay attention on natural surroundings and out side activities. As far as I know, below are a couple of complementary to solve the problems.
The first fact to note is the increasing of electronic devices in society. Truly, teenagers tendency to use electronic products such as mobile phones, computers and tablets everyday. Not only is its entertainment various, those products are also multitasking. Thus, people can access huge pieces of information without moving. For instance, they spent most of their spare time online, watching videos, playing games and socializing with friends on online platforms rather than hanging out in sultry weather, especially outdoor adventures.
Another reason is that pressure of working in moderlized period, people is too busy to participate in another outside game. According to research, young one are afflicted with deadline and working schedule. They are inclined to devote themselves to jobs for promotion. It is reason that they are stuff in working because of the fear of unemployment, leading to less time to mountain, climbing or hiking.
In taking those problems, schools and companies should organize more activities for teenagers, which will motivate them training the physical health. It is positive way to make them realize the facts that outdoor planning enhance many the benefit of health.
To sum up, talking into consideration all of above-mentioned facts, it is obviously that teenagers incline to sedentary. A solution to this problem require proactive actions from individual. If people can control between indoor and outdoor actions, they will reap the advantages as discussed above.
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also, first, if, so, thus, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40590405904 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91807502141 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.667896678967 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1431168119 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5625 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9375 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6875 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159278760055 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385032520779 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376206339475 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0694960666448 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0164849748239 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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