Essay 5: Some people believe that famous people’s support towards international aid organisations draw attention to problems and contribute significantly for their achievements. Do you agree or disagree?
The benefit brought to global aid organisations by participation of celebrities has arisen arguments in our society. Apparently, I am of the opinion that the contributions made by them to these organisations’ programs are minor compared to significant potential drawbacks because the distraction created by their appearances and personal scandals that may have negative effects on social campaigns.
On the one hand, the most persuasive argument stems from the fact that the foreseeable distraction from main objectives may be raised once celebrities appear in the pubic. Obviously, celebrities who often desire to raise their own profile and reputations instead of focusing on the programs’ outcomes. Consequently, when these famous stars mainly focus on polishing their brands and enhancing the publicity, the crowd of fans tend to get involved into these events only to see their faces or praise their achievements rather promoting the actual meaning of projects. As illustrations, there is a huge number of Tom Hank’s fans may attend in a support charity, that is primarily organised to provide donations for disable children, to celebrate his new top-hit movies and forget about donations.
In addition, I am strongly in favor of many when considering the personal scandals of celebrities may have damaging effects on the achievements of these authorities. Firstly, once these organisations select inappropriate people to represent at public speech, it may lead to unwanted detrimental consequences. As a result, the public views may be turned into the negative way, then these projects may lose the concentration and belief of communities. For instance, if Carlos, a soccer star who was facing a controversy towards sexual scandals in the World Cup league, appears on the stage to raise funds for women living with mental health issues, inhabitants might argue about the serious aims of the campaign.
In conclusion, it is sometime believed by some that the contributions of celebrities to programs made by international aid organisations are positive. However, my stance is that their participation have negative impacts on those due to distraction from public determinations and scandals in their lives.
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Comments
The conclusion has been
The conclusion has been separated into 2 sentences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 166, Rule ID: PUBIC_X[1]
Message: Did you mean 'public'?
Suggestion: public
...e raised once celebrities appear in the pubic. Obviously, celebrities who often desir...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52046783626 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29606227764 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59649122807 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.5808173226 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.333333333 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172948824366 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637863921193 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550704152807 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112482446941 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379109917501 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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