Failure is a proof that the desire wasn’t strong enough. To what extent do you agree?
Some people are convinced that failure results from the lack of aims as they are not sure about their decisions However, some failures might also be caused by an external factor that is beyond a person's control.
Many people do not try hard to attain their goal is because they do not have a strong purpose. This is because they are not sure about their decision either, making them unable to have decent preparation to their goal and failing. For example, a survey conducted by Harvard Medical School towards their class of 2019 graduate found that the bottom 10% of the lowest GPA graduate at that time was not really having a desire to be a doctor at all. The only reason they stuck to the end was because of their parents made them to do so.
On the other hand, the involvement of an external factor could also be the reason why someone fails. This is because the world is too big for someone to handle something beyond their capacity. Even though they have prepared for the best, they will fail eventually because of the inability to avoid undetected threats. For instance, a lighting at a football match between Argentina and the United States in 2019 was found an electric short during the match. Even though the Argentina team had kept their performance high until the end for the 1-0 score, however, the score changed to draw eventually. The light issue became a big problem for the Argentina team, causing them off guard.
In all, although I believe that failure is caused by the lack of desire, nonetheless, an external factor might also be the reason why someone fails. Thus, both views need to be analyzed objectively to find the root of the problem.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, nonetheless, really, so, thus, for example, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68474576271 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30012926956 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538983050847 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1850291833 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.307692308 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0596297947965 0.244688304435 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0229848436838 0.084324248473 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369581087014 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0406189989567 0.151304729494 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286857805908 0.056905535591 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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