The family has a great influences on children’s development, but the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part in children's life. Do you agree or disagree.
Many people believe that the youngster's growth is being impacted by the external environments rather than their family. I disagree with this view, because I consider that both above factors have their distinctive merits and should each play an integral in the life of children.
On the one hand, I would argue that the outer environments have certain effects on children. From an knowledge perspective, the children are learnt from teachers in the school, who have responsibilities to communicate the basic science lessons, which foster the development of children's brain. Futhermore, the extracurrilar activities enable teenagers to increase their soft skills as well as relationships. For example, the holiday camp which is annually held in summers creates more opportunities for children to make new friends. In addition, competition activities make it easer than ever for them to improve their presentation capability via debate contests, the finesse via cooking matches, the health via sport matches.
On the other hand, I believe that the parently influences are equally essential to offspring's improvement. Firstly, parents' upbringing have large role in sharping their children's character and behavior. For instance, a child who is being loved and taught about selflessness would tend to become an altruist. Secondly, the home traditions would contribute to children's aptitudes which are positive impact on their intelligence. A good example for this is the family where the father is a chess veteran. This ideal background could creates favorable conditions for his descendant to study and develop chess skill from an early age.
In conclusion, it seem to me that the family and social are equally important elements in development of children, and I disagree that the home's impact is outweighed by the effect from surrouding enironment.
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youngsters'' or 'youngster's'?
Suggestion: youngsters'; youngster's
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'create'
Suggestion: create
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Message: Did you mean 'seems'?
Suggestion: seems
...l from an early age. In conclusion, it seem to me that the family and social are eq...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46503496503 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00617365646 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608391608392 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6880241118 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.642857143 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224736222633 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717902040881 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659353757395 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144113612417 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442043752948 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.