In the future, it is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people in some countries. Is this positive or negative development?
Thanks to great advances in health services and people’s living conditions have improved, now the average life expectancy of a person increased significantly. Nevertheless, experts have defined that this trend will bring harmful impacts on society in the future. In my perspective, I totally agree with their view but I believe that this tendency also has useful effects and they will be outlined in this essay.
On the positive side, non-profit and charity organisations will have a large of members. I mean, the old who are financially comfortable and much free time willing to attend community projects to enhance their neighbourhood and society. For example, we can easily see old people in developed countries engage in charity works such as providing food and roof for the homeless, collecting waste, etc. That, in fact, not only create high values for their community but also instil a great sense of responsibility and altruism into the young generation. Secondly, countries with a higher proportion of senior people mean they have a more experienced and highly educated workforce. They can easily research or operate automatic machines to improve labour productivity. This makes a huge contribution to the economy in general.
On the other hand, like two sides of a coin, this phenomenon will produce many pressures. One of those is that lays great stress on the budget’s government because the government will have to pour very much money into health service, building nursing homes, etc. and tax-payers will have to bear a greater financial burden and the youth who are of working age will have to worker harder and care the elderly at the same time. Furthermore, the lack of a young labour workforce would cause stagnation for the growth of the economy and technological innovation. As a matter of fact, many first world countries whose proportion of senior citizens is higher than that of young people, such as Japan, are experiencing these undesirable effects.
In conclusion, the state of an ageing population in some countries can bring some certain benefits. However, in the near future, it definitely causes terrible drawbacks to that countries and I think that the government should take steps to avoid falling into this situation.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, for example, i mean, i think, in conclusion, in fact, in general, such as, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1901.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20821917808 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85324544515 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4241640012 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.823529412 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3529411765 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258895687121 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700648843676 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458652931376 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144514122606 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205096090286 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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