In the future, it is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people in some countries. Is this positive or negative development?
These days, pollution around the world is gradually increasing. There is an opinion that the percentage of the elderly will increase significantly in some nations in the future. From my point of view, this statement has both pros and cons.
On the one hand, old people live for such a long time in life. Therefore, the longer they stay in the country, the more experience they get. What I mean is that senior citizens have experienced all sorts of things, from failures to successes. A benefit for young people will be that they can learn from their past experiences and avoid committing similar mistakes in the future. Moreover, since the young, nowadays, are more occupied with their jobs, entertainment, than the old, they lack health to do jobs. Hence, they will have more time to do other activities, like engaging in charity work. As a result, providing free labor to their communities would have a positive impact on society.
On the other hand, beside the advantages, there are also some disadvantages for older people. Individuals get older, but they will be weaker and suffer more diseases. It would lead to bear more of a financial burden for families and the government as they have to pay for healthcare costs. Plus, younger people will experience some difficulties when the proportion of the old is higher. There is a lack of jobs for the young. It will be challenging for them to make a living. However, older people can continue to make a significant contribution to the economy through paid work.
To conclude, I believe that the young generation has a chance to absorb several lessons from old generations, however, it would affect the government and the young’s jobs. Population aging has more disadvantages than its advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, i mean, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98305084746 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79225341171 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569491525424 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6982484832 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.875 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4375 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176769985449 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604809266306 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702760786341 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953274380221 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0799093070977 0.056905535591 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.