give opinion..Nowadays,children spending more time in playing computer games rather than doing sport.Why?

Essay topics:

give opinion..
Nowadays,children spending more time in playing computer games rather than doing sport.
Why?

This day, the children spending time a lot to playing computer game than doing sport. In this essay, I completely disagree. It is that give more disadvantage than advantage. For the reasons.
In the one hand, from that issue, the children who spending time a lot to playing game, could be advantage. For example, the game which is played from children will be increased the skill English language. the owing to, many type game using foreign language and who also learn English from some game. the absolutely, many benefit when the people who can using game with wisely. Except, learning foreign language thet also learning such as skills to fix action when they have problem and can get many friends from the application. I hope, the children can to using computer game suitable with time and only use in a little time.
On the other hand, there is no doubt, the people live can change with many ways became of many children more interesting to playing game than sport. Firstly, the adults can have introverted character, because of they more focus with game of computer. Secondly, the people have stay lifestyles, it is because they prefer shit in in front of computer, and in addition, the computer which is function to playing game online or online have damage to body. The evidences, many people in the would be attack may disaster because of a bad live behavior some people in daily active.
I believe, the hebit can change, when the parents always control the children and the children have to make a plan and should to be continue to exercise to get good pattern and active lifestyle.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 206, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...e increased the skill English language. the owing to, many type game using foreign ...
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Line 2, column 301, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... who also learn English from some game. the absolutely, many benefit when the peopl...
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Line 2, column 317, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun benefit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many benefits'.
Suggestion: many benefits
...English from some game. the absolutely, many benefit when the people who can using game with...
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Line 3, column 201, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
... adults can have introverted character, because of they more focus with game of computer. Secon...
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Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: in
...estyles, it is because they prefer shit in in front of computer, and in addition, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, in addition, no doubt, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75812274368 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38206424819 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501805054152 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 417.6 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 12.0 2.52805611222 475% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5904690189 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8666666667 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4666666667 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304081488477 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118769633405 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130517398218 0.0667982634062 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207700902882 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140943527744 0.056905535591 248% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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