Given high unemployment rate, it is recommended that the government only provide primary education and no secondary education. What do you think?
It is a view that there has a high rating unemployment becase the government only provide the primary education and no secondary education. This essay will discuss my point of view for this problem.
First, there are some benefits if government only give the primary education. The advantage for this is the cost for education will reduce a lot because these countries don't need to build a new place for secondary school. The primary education can be provided some basic skills that could help people do some easy tasks. Teachers don't need to learn in higher school because they just teach only some basic things for children.
Second, learning in the secondary school means that you can have more chances to learn in a higher school such as colleagues, universities. The more knowledge you have, the more choices for your life. For instance, in primary school, almost teachers only teach you how to calculate the number while in university, it will make you know more some equations, some definitions of mathematic, so that you can have a wide knowledge than others. More example for this, all countries are modernized, so that the modern techniques are required a lot, especially Artificial Intelligent (AI) such as robots. Some citizens may feel not under knowledge because they don't have to learn in the secondary education and higher education. Robots will do the jobs, and this will make people jobless.
Third, these will bring some drawbacks if there's only primary learning. The disadvantages here is that people can not know what the strong point what they have because people don't fully understand. For example, a company will not have the leaders if all of the employees or staffs in the company learn only primary education; this will led to the problem that no one is more knowledgeable than others so that they can be hard to manage all the employees working properly. This can be the main problem for the reason why there is a high unemployment rate.
In conclusion, this view have the pros and cons. The advantages here is that these countries should reduce a lot of money and the teachers don't need to learn in a high educated school. The disadvatages is you can have joblessness if everyone learn the basic things. They can not deal with the improvement in technology. Form my point of view, this disadvatages is outweigh the advantages. The government should encourage people to learn in a secondary school to reduce the amount of unemployed people.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'wide knowledge'.
Suggestion: wide knowledge
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, third, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 7.85571142285 293% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 419.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89737470167 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64655959983 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427207637232 0.561755894193 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3580092499 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2727272727 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0454545455 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59090909091 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239350415396 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846574956799 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112855505592 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171356607987 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0841416073076 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 169, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ll reduce a lot because these countries dont need to build a new place for secondary...
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Line 2, column 330, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...elp people do some easy tasks. Teachers dont need to learn in higher school because ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'wide knowledge'.
Suggestion: wide knowledge
...ons of mathematic, so that you can have a wide knowledge than others. More example for this, all...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 653, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...y feel not under knowledge because they dont have to learn in the secondary educatio...
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Line 4, column 43, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...ird, these will bring some drawbacks if theres only primary learning. The disadvantage...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 175, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ong point what they have because people dont fully understand. For example, a compan...
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Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... a company will not have the leaders if all of the employees or staffs in the company lear...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 336, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
...learn only primary education; this will led to the problem that no one is more know...
^^^
Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... reduce a lot of money and the teachers dont need to learn in a high educated school...
^^^^
Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
... my point of view, this disadvatages is outweigh the advantages. The government should e...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, third, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 7.85571142285 293% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 419.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89737470167 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64655959983 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427207637232 0.561755894193 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3580092499 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2727272727 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0454545455 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59090909091 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239350415396 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846574956799 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112855505592 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171356607987 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0841416073076 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.