The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The idea of whether the government should restrict the level of media violence has been the subject of considerable debate in the last decades. In my opinion, although limiting the amount of violent film and TV programs is an excellent way to downgrade violent crimes, the key to resolve the issue is to use legislation and education methods.
On the one hand, disseminating the large unrestricted violent contents on the screen has an adverse impact on the people and society. For the younger generation, it would destruct their mental developments. Unlike adults, minors are often curious and keen to imitate the violent behaviors which have been sighted from TV programs, possibly they are mentally immature and incapable of distinguishing the right and wrong. For adults who lake of self-control abilities, an excessive broadcast of the violent action movies could act as their references to engage with potential criminal activities. For example, a serial killer murdered more than 30 people during the period between 1993 and 2000 and claimed that a violent movie inspired him.
On the other hand, banning violent films is not the best solution to reduce crime in the community. A vast amount of crimes happened definitely because criminals have never received enough education. The degree to which people are influenced by what they see in the media depends directly on how they are educated about social responsibility and personal accountability. Furthermore, a relax legal system also encourages offenders to commit a crime. Therefore, it is better to adopt a strict law system to solve and control crime problems.
In conclusion, while the government should restrict the amount of violence in the media because it is linked to crimes and social issues, I believe this is not a root solution for violent crimes. Alternatively, the government should more focus on the education of young adults and the national legal system.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: who is a lake
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...d personal accountability. Furthermore, a relax legal system also encourages offenders ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21474358974 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85764996057 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592948717949 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3895272466 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.214285714 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231385387629 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722634862807 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479534954029 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142621690641 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439064789229 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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