The government should spend money in promoting sport and art in school, rather sponsoring professional sports and art events in communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people argue that authorities should invest in sport and art facilities in campus instead of supporting occupational sports or art in society. In my opinion, both in-campus and off-campus sports and art are equally important, which should be emphasized by government unbiasedly.
It is obviously that investing in school facilities can benefits students’ extra-curricular life greatly. One of the most important significance is that it will increase students’ participation and enthusiasm towards sport and art. By doing sport activities, for example, students’ physical conditions and willpower will be cultivated. Similarly, by visiting campus galleries, students could broaden their horizons and consequently improve their aesthetic values. Besides, in this day and age, students are under huge academic pressure, which means that they should have a pathway to release their stress. Undoubtedly, taking part in more sport and artistic activities will be a reasonable choice. In addition, compared with professional sports and public art in communities, which tend to be sponsored by business organizations, campus facilities need more financial supports by the government.
However, investing money in school by no means that the governments should ignore societal sports and arts. In fact, governments could attract more citizens’ attention towards professional sports and art events such as local sports clubs and exhibitions by sponsoring them. This practice will also be an effective method to stimulate local economy and improve citizens’ sense of identity. Furthermore, the governments’ sponsorship in sports and arts can also encourage more people to take part in these leisure activities. Investing in society could benefits more inhabitants in comparison with that in school since students’ number only occupies a small proportion of the whole residents. Therefore, governments’ support is also of vital importance for the development of society.
In conclusion, it is appropriate for governments to invest their financial budget proportionately in both school and society to improve the athletic and artistic amenities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
... activities. Investing in society could benefits more inhabitants in comparison with tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, furthermore, however, if, similarly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.99363057325 5.12529762239 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.41936937169 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550955414013 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4352440749 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 117.625 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.9375 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294755753765 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106093413327 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891365432476 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181725168514 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.081512476775 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.46 12.4159519038 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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