Governments around the world are investing heavily in space exploration. Some people say this money should be spent on helping people living in poverty, or with significant health problems. To what extent do you agree?
There is a tendency that many countries in different parts of the world are paying an enormous amount of money for discovering space; however, some people think that this budget should be allocated to solve poverty and morbidity. Although space exploration plays a certain role in humankind’s development, I agree with those who hold the opinion that helping the underprivileged is a much more urgent problem that requires prior huge financial support from governments.
Proponents of space exploration may argue that it is a necessary step in the advance of mankind because it holds the ultimate key to the human race’s long-term existence. This is due to the fact that the living conditions all over the world have constantly been under threats from global overpopulation and the over-increasing socio-economic growth. Consequently, the Earth’s natural habitat could be too harsh for human life, which requires the need to seek for other planets to live in. Therefore, spending money in space exploration early can equip mankind with sufficient preparation in terms of both knowledge and willpower for living on a different planet. Additionally, space travel also helps our community to make major strides in numerous fields, including lightweight material in engines and digital optics used in medical diagnostics.
From an economic and humane perspective, I believe that ensuring that every person on earth has a decent standard of living is far more integral to our daily life that needs to take precedence over. Firstly, whereas space exploration is more about the long-term value, current alarming issues such as poverty and diseases right now should also receive meticulous attention since their detrimental influences on human survival appear sooner and clearer. For instance, if a nation cannot take any actions to prevent poverty and health problems from climbing, both domestic and foreign consumption may go down, leading to national and even international economic downturns. Secondly, there is a potential risk that spending billions of dollars and many years exploring space may get nothing in return, while in the same period of time that money could improve the lives of millions of individuals around the world. These billions of dollars could make a considerable difference in their lives by funding programs designed to help to educate, feed, and house the disadvantaged, impoverished, as well as to cure sick people globally, which would be far more significant than the benefits that may be acquired from space exploration.
In conclusion, notwithstanding the benefits of space discovery to our lives, it seems to me that the priority should be helping people living in poverty, or with serious health problems.
- With all the troubles in the world today money spent on space exploration is a complete waste The money could be better spent on other things To what extent do you agree or disagree 95
- At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages 73
- Nowadays many people choose to be self employed rather than to work for a company or organization Why might this be the case What could be the disadvantages of being self employed 73
- Governments around the world are investing heavily in space exploration Some people say this money should be spent on helping people living in poverty or with significant health problems To what extent do you agree 89
- Governments around the world are investing heavily in space exploration Some people say this money should be spent on helping people living in poverty or with significant health problems To what extent do you agree 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...et nothing in return, while in the same period of time that money could improve the lives of m...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...enefits of space discovery to our lives, it seems to me that the priority should ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1615.20841683 144% => OK
No of words: 431.0 315.596192385 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38051044084 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96240732341 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603248259861 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 506.74238477 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.1002086431 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.384615385 106.682146367 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.1538461538 20.7667163134 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6153846154 7.06120827912 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297553537596 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0984457642189 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064838540209 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198621835856 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047992946769 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 13.0946893788 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 50.2224549098 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.52 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 78.4519038076 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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