The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 words

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The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980
and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons
where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

The line graph illustrates the rate of people who expended their leisure time on 4 activities in the USA over the period of 30 years.

In general, What stands out from the line graph is that there were two opposite trends for these 5 figures. While Reading, surfing, hiking and watching TV engaged more elderly people after 30 years, the opposite was true for Theatre. Besides, hiking was an activity which was spent almost all the time by older people in the USA.

Starting at a quite high point, the proportion of people watching TV from the beginning to the 2000s,then, instead of continuing to increase, that figure declined at about 68% in the 2010s. Following that, there was significant waves a fifth in the figure for Reading in the 2000s, after taking off at 60% and higher than that at the first time. Similarly, the percentage of surfing the internet always went up enormously during 30 years.

On the other hand, Theatre was the only activity which had a decline trend. The proportion of people who surfed the internet had a high point at starting time,however, it reached its lowest point in the next 30 years. In contrast, a remarkable rise and not oscillations was witnessed in the percentage of hiking, with the highest point in the last year of period

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 159, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , however
...ternet had a high point at starting time,however, it reached its lowest point in the nex...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, similarly, then, while, in contrast, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1058.0 1615.20841683 66% => OK
No of words: 222.0 315.596192385 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76576576577 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52944673862 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581081081081 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 313.2 506.74238477 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3827114368 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.8 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108157525182 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436646047063 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0340055932458 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0731114908431 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222599686919 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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