The idea that whether diligence and persistence or material wealth and physical appearance are more significant remains a source of controversy. While all these are necessary, I believe that key factors for success in life are hard-working and determined.
On the one hand, money and attractive appearance are recently valued by society in the modern world. Firstly, people who come from affluent families have a good foundation. To be more precise, they could run their own business without fear of a lack of money. Secondly, good appearance is extremely essential in the fields of entertainment or fashion. If a person has a talent for singing but she is not beautiful, she will less likely be famous.
On the other hand, I would argue that working assiduously and having a dream are more significant. Take Bill Gate as an example, while he grew up in a rich family, he established his own company with his friend about a software known as Microsoft and become one of the richest people all over the world. He achieved this reputation because he is consistent with computer programming when he was a young boy. Furthermore, not everyone is fortunate so they have to make enormous efforts to pursue their dream. For example, even though Nick Vujicic has no limbs, he makes people admire his endeavor because he earns a bachelor's degree and is an influential speaker.
In conclusion, working industriously, good appearance, and money are all important, it seems to me that hard-working is much more valuable.
The idea that whether diligence and persistence or material wealth and physical appearance are more significant remains a source of controversy. While all these are necessary, I believe that key factors for success in life are hard-working and determined.
On the one hand, money and attractive appearance are recently valued by society in the modern world. Firstly, people who come from affluent families have a good foundation. To be more precise, they could run their own business without fear of a lack of money. Secondly, good appearance is extremely essential in the fields of entertainment or fashion. If a person has a talent for singing but she is not beautiful, she will less likely be famous.
On the other hand, I would argue that working assiduously and having a dream are more significant. Take Bill Gate as an example, while he grew up in a rich family, he established his own company with his friend about a software known as Microsoft and become one of the richest people all over the world. He achieved this reputation because he is consistent with computer programming when he was a young boy. Furthermore, not everyone is fortunate so they have to make enormous efforts to pursue their dream. For example, even though Nick Vujicic has no limbs, he makes people admire his endeavor because he earns a bachelor's degree and is an influential speaker.
In conclusion, working industriously, good appearance, and money are all important, it seems to me that hard-working is much more valuable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1268.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03174603175 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93166696639 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.642857142857 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6317909838 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5384615385 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288421404733 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103418803103 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164046022499 0.0667982634062 246% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257691115458 0.151304729494 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.312610724627 0.056905535591 549% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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