IELTS 6 Test 1 Writing Task 2 Academic You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are s

Nowadays, commercial appear everywhere and plays an important role in promoting company's budget. Many people think that consumers are affected by advertising than by their demand to buy some mass commodities. I strongly agree with this opinion.
Firstly, increasing smart gadget prompts media being popular. Actually, a person may have at least a phone, I believe that. So people are exposed to commercials inevitable through some popular social media they are utilizing such as Facebook, YouTube, TikTok, ...because that is compulsory to continue seeing your favorite programs. Over the long time of exposure, the perpetual ads would effect on consumers' subconscious to buy the same thing when they go to supermarket. Moreover, if the automated tool on internet analysis and find out which items we are search recent day, some same products would be introduced to users on all social network they log in. I have fine some clothes on E-commerce exchange once, after one day, I can get a lot of adverting on my Facebook and app in my phone.
Secondly, a part of the higher consumption is from young people who are admiring some influencer advertising. May be some sport or entertainment celebrities take park in a advertising to prominence commodities, which manipulates their fans to purchase it. For example, an idol name Rose, member of Black Pink was registered as a brand ambassador of Tiffany & Co, that will attract her fans to use that product.
In conclusion, I believe that Ads tool and new form of commercial would definitely effect on the higher rate of consumption goods that a consumers do not need but they still buy.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 390, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...me of exposure, the perpetual ads would effect on consumers subconscious to buy the sa...
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Line 2, column 795, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing on my Facebook and app in my phone. Secondly, a part of the higher consumpti...
^^^
Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...miring some influencer advertising. May be some sport or entertainment celebrities...
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Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... entertainment celebrities take park in a advertising to prominence commodities, ...
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Line 4, column 84, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[7]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...new form of commercial would definitely effect on the higher rate of consumption goods...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a consumer' or simply 'consumers'?
Suggestion: a consumer; consumers
...e higher rate of consumption goods that a consumers do not need but they still buy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, at least, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1364.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05185185185 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88587781044 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.681481481481 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9990532455 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.923076923 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7692307692 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53846153846 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.080643016841 0.244688304435 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0271805013587 0.084324248473 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0244013838496 0.0667982634062 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0512864470961 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203645538206 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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