IELTS TASK 2: Nowadays, young people admire stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
These days, admiring celebrities is assumed to make many postitive effects on fan's living. There are, however, many huge concerns about adverse ones. I, personally, would contend that this pattern has both the merits of the developments and its drawbacks. This essay will be discussed in-deeply below.
On the one hand, it brings an array of advantages. Firstly, the fans follow in the stars of footsteps. Indeed, idols are perfect mirrors associating with many aspects of life like morality for fans to imitate. For instance, many years ago, Emma Waston, talented actress and goodwill ambassador, made a moving speech about feminism motivating a massively huge number of women to have equal rights and breaking roughly stereotypes of masculinity. Similarly, the fans climb the labber of success. Behind the gorgeous stages, the process of practicing to become idols is a phenomenon worthying being cared due to its hard experience. Sometimes, the living of the fans get into trouble, so that period of time of stars helps them have motivation to pass and continuously pursue their dreams.
On the other hand, its negative aspects are not ignored. First and foremost, the fans so so crazy bout their idols. Some tend to blindly adored irrespective of everything. It is illustrated by the events of the previous period time when central areas are impacted seriously by natural disasters; many fans still donate a massive amount of money just to make fame and support for their foreign idols. Additionally, the fans imitate unsuitable things.There is a permanent gap between stars and fans. Irrespective of ages and jobs, some imitate to creat colourful hair, tattoo or too sexy clothes.
Overall. from the points I discussed above, I totally assume that this trend impacts both positively and negatively
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, similarly, so, still, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22680412371 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73326170058 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656357388316 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.1478702475 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1666666667 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0484264980182 0.244688304435 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0162579688193 0.084324248473 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0219178043373 0.0667982634062 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0357703870755 0.151304729494 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170744981564 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.02 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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