This is an IELTS Writing Task 2 sample answer essay from the real exam on the topic of kiwi fruit exports from New Zealand to various other countries.
The table above illustrates the export worth of New Zealand kiwis, calculated in the nation's respective currency (New Zealand dollars), to five countries, namely Japan, China, Mexico, Russia and Saudi Arabia, during the three years from 2010 to 2012.
Overall, it is transparent that Japan was the largest importer among the five importers throughout the researched period, while Saudi Arabia exhibited the smallest imported value. Additionally, all nations' imports of the studied products saw an upturn, with the exception of Saudi Arabia and Mexico.
271 million NZ dollars was the value of kiwis imported by Japan in 2010, after which the figure increased by 16,3 million in 2011 before reaching 325,3 million at the end of the research. China and Russia displayed similar trends, growing by approximately 9,8 million and 0,6 million the following year compared to their starting 75 and 0,9 million, then ending at 94 million and 2,4 million, respectively.
Meanwhile, the 2010 Mexico and Saudia Arabia import value of New Zealand kiwis was 6 million and 290 thousand dollars each. The data for Mexico then proceeded to experience a drop in the subsequent timestamp, falling to 2,4 million dollars and witnessing a slight rebound to 3,3 million afterwards. Saudi Arabia exhibited a more steady downturn, decreasing to 106 and 82 thousand dollars for each respective year.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 253, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
... of the studied products saw an upturn, with the exception of Saudi Arabia and Mexico. 271 million N...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 3.0 24.0651302605 12% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1157.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 219.0 315.596192385 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28310502283 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66867535531 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616438356164 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 332.1 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.7158342372 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.625 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.375 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.375 7.06120827912 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0698473067408 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0354120410495 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508540171613 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0534765091479 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560724399128 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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