An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why is this the case? Is it a positive or negative development?
The popularity of cosmetic surgery has surged in recent years, with many individuals opting for procedures to enhance their appearance. This essay will first outline the underlying causes of this trend, before arguing that it is more of a negative development.
The primary motivation for individuals seeking cosmetic surgery is often rooted in a desire to conform to social beauty standards. The pervasive influence of the mass media and technology has amplified the focus on physical appearance, making many people feel pressure to conform to beauty ideals and resort to surgical intervention to achieve their desired look. For example, the widespread use of photo-editing applications and the proliferation of "picture-perfect" images on social media platforms have led many to seek cosmetic procedures to attain a similar level of perceived perfection. This is further compounded by advances in medical technology, which have made cosmetic surgery more accessible and affordable, further fueling the increase in such procedures.
Notwithstanding the potential benefits of improved self-confidence and satisfaction with one's appearance, I believe that the growing popularity of cosmetic surgery is predominantly detrimental. One major problem is that it can lead to an excessive focus on external beauty or, in other words, foster a culture of superficiality, where individuals are judged primarily on their physical appearance rather than their character or abilities. This can lead to a decline in the self-worth for those who may not fit into the narrow definitions of beauty propagated by society. Worse still, the pursuit of physical perfection can become an obsession for some individuals, leading to them having multiple procedures and a vicious cycle of dissatisfaction with their appearance.
In conclusion, the rise in the number of people having cosmetic surgery can be attributed to the pressure to conform to societal beauty standards and increased accessibility of these procedures. From my perspective, the promotion of superficial values as well as the potential psychological risks makes this development largely negative.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...d self-confidence and satisfaction with ones appearance, I believe that the growing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, so, still, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71651090343 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.4702511753 2.80592935109 124% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582554517134 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.3778617372 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.916666667 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264836610771 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898926392447 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439259520646 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157657666535 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228909482147 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 19.71 50.2224549098 39% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.29 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...d self-confidence and satisfaction with ones appearance, I believe that the growing ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, so, still, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71651090343 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.4702511753 2.80592935109 124% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582554517134 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.3778617372 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.916666667 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264836610771 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898926392447 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439259520646 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157657666535 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228909482147 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 19.71 50.2224549098 39% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.29 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.