Individual greed and selfishness have been the basis of the modern society. Some people think that we must return to the older and more traditional values of respect for the family and the local community in order to create a better world to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Owing to the rapid societies, greed and selfishness seemed to be the fundamental standards in all aspects of our life. Meanwhile, others proposed that restoring conventional values or performing esteem to older people might be offered more upsides in the entire community. From my perspective, I am inclined towards reverting to the traditional value that human beings may be taken into consideration this matter.
In the emerging technology, many people almost have been contacted online with advanced technology such as mobile phones or social networks which are optimized for users. What is interpreted that satisfying with all people desirable about how to become a wealthy person or make comfort of those. From this, workaholics are deemed to prevail, that is gained to their desire. Whereby, they are less likely to spend time with their own family or friends, as a result of people who become egocentric, isolated in their closest relationship.
On the downside, along with the latest technology, nearly, young people claimed that the older generation is not comprehended in using these devices. Indeed, some evidence is widely acknowledged that they performed as an excelled person in performing that. It leads until they are feeling bother themselves in guiding of elderly. Moreover, there is no real-time in carrying out to engage in community activities which that lacking transmitting their voice to make a good life. This has meant that keeping own standpoint, do not share anything with the development of society.
In conclusion, it is irrefutable that the hectic and toxic world is creeping into in the entire life. We cannot reverse from the age of the medieval is existing this period, however, we could be taken the fundamental values is the origin and even made a critical point in an individualism. Putting forwards to prosperous life and respect to own family and the place where we live.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... taken into consideration this matter. In the emerging technology, many people ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, so, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21035598706 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85380748722 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624595469256 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9572279984 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.333333333 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93333333333 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161669176323 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452239424494 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365825246869 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878256704154 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276262491918 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.