It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents.
There is a difference in opinions as to whether students should live independently away from their parents while studying at college. Although many people agree with this, my view is that it depends on cultural background of the students.
It is very common for students to live far away from family at the early ages in Western – based culture. Especially, when they reach the age of 18, almost all youngsters choose to earn a living on their own. While many students decide to go on higher education and work their way through university, others earn money or gain valuable experience through part-time and full-time jobs. I believe that this practice is closely related to their further development and future success.
However, in many Asian countries such as Vietnam, where traditional values play an integral part in the lives of young people, I think the drawbacks outweigh the benefits. First, as most Vietnamese universities are located in the main cities such as Hanoi and Ho Chi Minh, students have to move to these cities to enroll in universities. As a result, family members have less chance to get together and share with each other. Youngsters can only visit their parents on some special occasions such as Tet holiday or Independent Day, etc. Moreover, when students do not work or study under parents’ supervision, some can fall behind with their study or drop out of college. Because they have little experience and living skills, they might easily fall prey for scams while pursuing tertiary education. I consider living away from home not only leads to the unfortunate disappearance of the country’s long-standing value, but it also cause a lot of serious accidents.
In conclusion, I argue that it is better for youngsters to live outside home while they are studying at university, although it has some negative impacts as well. In other words, it depends on where the students come from.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
There is a difference in opinions as to whether students should live independently away...
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Line 5, column 942, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'causes'?
Suggestion: causes
...apos;s long-standing value, but it also cause a lot of serious accidents. In concl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.046875 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75283766946 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603125 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5262541006 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.666666667 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351568578287 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107103468479 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905529763677 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223609255731 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271516336658 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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