It is a common aspiration among many young people to run their own business. Rather than work for an employer.Do you think the advantages of working for yourself overweigh the drawbacks?

In contemporary world,it is not very rare for youngsters to priority to self employment over a job.However,I believe it is far more advantageous to be employed than running a private firm as,it has limited working hours,regular income and people are more disciplined.

One of the main reason for favoring employment is, it has particular timings for work.For example, most of the jobs globally are for 8 hours,this is not the case when people have their own businesses.Also,there are holidays and leaves sanctioned to every employee.If an individual is unwell they have legal right to be granted a leave without pay cut ,thus it is more beneficial as opposed to,an own business where, people cannot take a day off with no loss of income.

In addition,there are more positive aspects of having a job.Firstly,there is continious source of earning irrespective of companies budgets.For instance,carillion collapse in 2018 had no affect on the wages of its workers despite incurring a huge financial loss to industry.Secondly,working under an employer makes individuals more disciplined and punctual because there is a start and end time of work .To make it clear,offices mostly begin at 8 in morning and finishes by 7 in evening for 5 working days a week.Hence, making it incumbent on working people to follow it without any excuses.

To conclude,despite growing number of youth aspiring their private firms,I strongly advocate the idea of persuing and retaining a job,owing to the reasons of income security and less hours of input requires when compared to private business.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25691699605 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.57853572258 2.80592935109 128% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.656126482213 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 63.0 20.2975951904 310% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 144.743523171 49.4020404114 293% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 332.5 106.682146367 312% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 63.25 20.7667163134 305% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 28.5 7.06120827912 404% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.01903807615 578% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256960570373 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141239924636 0.084324248473 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560129992464 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141239924636 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560129992464 0.056905535591 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.0 13.0946893788 267% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -0.93 50.2224549098 -2% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.0 11.3001002004 257% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.12 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.5 8.58950901804 134% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 9.78957915832 301% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 27.2 10.1190380762 269% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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