It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future Do you think it is a positive or negative development

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It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In many countries, it is forecast that the elderly will outnumber the young in the years to come. In my opinion, this expected situation would be detrimental as the economy and public health would suffer tremendously from a lack of young inhabitants.

A society having a higher percentage of senior citizens than young ones would have to face up to serious economic issues. Firstly, a preponderant number of people in their twilight years would put an enormous strain on the national pension scheme. The taxes contributed by the young working class would not be sufficient to cover the pension plan, exposing the older generations to the risk of losing this vital subsidy. Secondly, a shortage in the workforce is likely to happen. For example, there would be fewer people for the maintenance of electrical facilities as such work is not suitable for old workers. Consequently, factories would not be able to operate at their full capacities, hindering the overall economic growth.

Health issues related to a future population dominated by aged people are also a menace that should be taken into account. As for people in their pensionable ages, chances are public health services will fail to take care of them due to its lack of staff. The elderly would, therefore, be obliged to take out private health insurance, which only wealthy ones can afford, or to suffer from degenerative diseases all by themselves. Concerning the young, bearing a greater responsibility of sustaining the economy, they would run increasing risks of wearing themselves out, both physically and mentally, which would impair their living conditions, let alone their life expectancy.

In conclusion, it seems to me that in a possible future where the proportion of older people is superior to that of younger ones, society as a whole would have to face severe hardship.

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Average: 8.7 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, as for, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12541254125 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81894169273 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600660066007 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5401221957 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.461538462 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3076923077 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20619882002 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727445645413 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432495694855 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131168679293 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146958521528 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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