Currently, there is a common belief that it is necessary for people to take risks in professional areas and private areas. Whether this behaviour is beneficial has become a heated debate. For my part, despite some drawbacks relate to this action, there are actually more merits we can acquire from this.
On the one hand, people will face downsides if they are willing to undertake risks. One demerit would be the probability of economic loss to people. It is usually hard for individuals to achieve their goals easily and most of the time they are suffering from failures. In view of this, taking risks will be harmful to one’s life quality. For example, businessmen will invest money in goods which are promising. However, when the price trend goes against their expectation, they undergo the probability to encounter bankruptcy and live in poor life. On top of that, not only does the economic loss will happen, but also the loss of friendship or family if some extreme cases happen.
On the other hand, the population and society can have more access to benefits if they are open to taking risks. There is a vital connection between trying new things and making promotions. In this sense, the progress we made is based on failure and loss, and the revolution of current societies is also built on this. For example, in the professional areas, the invention of light went through lots of risky experiments, but when it was created it brought a huge convenience to human beings; in personal lives, when a good opportunity which has the potential to change the fate of a family appears, it indeed needs the courage to capture it and this courage undoubtedly comes from the character of taking adventures.
To conclude, although there are disadvantages to taking risks in life, I believe we can gain more advantages, and it will lead to prosperity and creativity in the civil world.
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- The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 73
- The maps below show an industrial area in the town Norbiton and planned future development of the site 78
- Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies Do you agree or disagree 89
- It is important for people to take risks both in their professional lives and their personal lives Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages 56
- The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 124, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n professional areas and private areas. Whether this behaviour is beneficial has become...
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Line 3, column 397, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...essmen will invest money in goods which are promising. However, when the price trend goes aga...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, for example, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90153846154 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66110979207 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578461538462 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.0162020833 49.4020404114 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5625 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3125 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199065521397 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571555994205 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667471786149 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0943958920964 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518857279158 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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