It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill To what extent do you agree of disagree

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It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree of disagree?

The health is one of the essential that a lot of people (especially those who already have gotten diseases and got trouble in body-health ) always take care of. Why I say that? The reason for that though is that one quote has to demonstrate:” If you have heath that means you have everything, but If you do not have health that means you have nothing. So that, in question was given, the heath is described as a subject that was argued. Specifically, the problem in this is should we spend public money to encourage people to have a healthy lifestyle than spend that to treat people who have been gotten in health problems. People explain that spending money to inspirit healthily is better. Nevertheless, my viewpoint is using money to treat people who got ill; the reasons for that was explained below.
Firstly, although I am not the richest person; live in the biggest house; have the richest parents, but I know I am still happier than a lot of people(maybe even more), the people that I mentioned are gotten (were gotten) ill or diseases when they were born (or in a long time). A lot of diseases that take a lot of money like cancers and also bones-problem; and if that are rare diseases will take more money to treat(even if that do not have medicine may be that can not tell today is the last day of his/her life or not). This disease normally is extremely expensive; it can be a huge burden to poor(especially extremely poor) family;(money for living for life/future still unknown), and their child (their future) like a number 0. All of my thoughts are shown through the sentences above.

Secondly, I behold a lot of people that had problems in his/her body need treatment(or heath-repaired activities) for all of this proof. The public money is worthy for a lot of people give all of their “blood, sweat and tears” and their most beautiful youth for work until they died. Though a lot of people got “sick“ in the body they do not have “sick“ in their souls or in knowingly, they got power in their hearts/in their brains. A lot of people were gotten HIV/AIDS or STDs (by, unfortunately)/(when they got mistakes in their past), and they help other people. They share a lot of information about HIV/AIDS(the diseases spread through sex) and help how to protect when sex and also answer questions that people are still confused about. Furthermore, a lot of people got health problems still spend their life or their entire living life that still exist to develop their hometowns, their cities, their countries, or even worldwide. Even more, if they are talented people or phenomenal fall in heath (can not work anymore)because the money can not be sent to them to repair their health: that is extremely wasting talents. Those are all things which I believe my viewpoint is suitable.
By way of inclusion, I once again restate that spending public money to treat ill people is necessary and right. The money should spend on those who got an unlucky situation; and also help people that support the community.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 13.1623246493 213% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 30.0 7.30460921844 411% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 72.0 24.0651302605 299% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2482.0 1615.20841683 154% => OK
No of words: 529.0 315.596192385 168% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69187145558 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.20363070211 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65695344121 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444234404537 0.561755894193 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 750.6 506.74238477 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 11.0 2.52805611222 435% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.5277081438 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.19047619 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1904761905 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61904761905 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208504916947 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730856933682 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755179979688 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163917059385 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862935240599 0.056905535591 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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