Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do you agree with this statement.
Starting from the end of the 20th century, technological devices spreading all over the world brought substantial problems related to health. In particular, most of children are facing with this trouble causing some disability problems and obesity. Therefore, nowadays, there are a lot of controversies around the issue of directing children to a healthy lifestyle. Some people believe that the main luggage is on the shoulders of children, while others think that schools should help children on this way. In my opinion, both schools and parents are accountable to tackle this problem.
Firstly, the experience shows that childrens’ upbringing affects their future life and habits. So, considering that upbringing style is highly depends on the parents, parents have to organise theirs children’ daily activities properly. But , the study illustrates that the main shortage of the new families is not to have a life-work balance. As a result, they can not pay attention their children and this cause their sitting down in front of the TV all day long and eating junk food.
In this occasion, educational institutes are the best opportunity for parents. Taking to account that the second place children spend their time mostly is school, the education system have to be created and managed smartly for supervising children in a healthy way. Including sport activities to the study program and also adjusting the quality of food in canteen, school can overcome this substantial problem.
In my point of view, the government have also a significant role on solving this problem That is why, the products entering to territory of the country, the places for doing sports, the supervising schools and community is completely up to government’s policy.
In conclusion, let us not to forget that today’s child is tomorrow’s parent and children’s upbringing and health situation will affect the whole next generation. Parents, schools and goverment must work together for overcoming all problems affecting children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in particular, in short, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46372239748 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04901256014 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602523659306 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7459326811 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.466666667 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297089267417 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102639044012 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595298636245 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161944309864 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539116492416 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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