In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The phenomenon of increasing cases such as child obesity and health difficulties on the youngster occurs in many nations. Some people consider that this is one of the government jobs to tackle the issues. From my point of view, the government is not the main responsible for this issue, however, this is more parent job to keep their children in shape.
First and foremost, the children lifestyle have been completely changing compared to a few decades ago when they engaged in many physical activities such as cycling with their peer and catching a kite. However, in today world, such activities have been declining, especially in the metropolitan cities where the parents worry to let their children playing outdoor because of the several reasons, for instance, child abduction and bullying. this behaviour makes the children have less physical activity and develop sedentary behaviour. As a result, the occurrence of negative consequences such as child obesity and early diabetes is unavoidable.
In many cases, the obesity and decreasing physical well-being of the youngster are caused by parent behaviour. They allow the children to consume unhealthy food such as processed food and junk food, and unaware in term of the bad consequences led to these eating habits. Moreover, the parents are indirectly supporting their children idle-lifestyle by providing plenty of plaything such as video game which makes the children spent much of their time indoors and do less physical exercise.
To sum up, the parent plays an important role in the increasing number of child obesity and health issue in children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun plaything seems to be countable; consider using: 'plenty of playthings'.
Suggestion: plenty of playthings
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, such as, as a result, in many cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1357.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25968992248 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77513966428 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565891472868 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.072674457 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.363636364 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4545454545 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.09090909091 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126653323663 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519159086375 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330209636671 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0749479931726 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282922768546 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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