In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
some people argue that schoolchildren should be encouraged to have a paid job because it brings more work experience, knowledge, and responsibility to young people. Although this is true to some extent, it is my belief that children should not be promoted to do paid work.
Obviously, remunerative activities may offer several benefits. firstly, these who are getting a paid job in early school age can gain more work experience than those who do nothing. For example, some waged jobs like restaurant server will help children to have more opportunities to improve communication when they serve clients. secondly, children can learn a meaningful lesson about the value of money and become more responsible for their life. If children believe that it would be easy to earn good money without much effort, they will impulse buying and not set aside for the future.
However, I would argue that the drawbacks are more significant than benefits. firstly, having paid work make people neglect in their school programs. this is because schoolchildren do not have enough time to do homework, which consolidates their concepts learned at school. Hence, it would be difficult for students to attain high achieving academic results. secondly, child laborers are often exploited at the workplace by their employers. For instance, some companies such as Nike tends to employ children in developing countries to stitch soccer balls because they can save the huge sum by paying children less than others.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of getting paid work outweigh the possible benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1353.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24418604651 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77929680238 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612403100775 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2423823004 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6428571429 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252586477776 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827269594544 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645848584444 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160499836036 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573822309059 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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