In many countries, children participate in some paid work in their spare time. Some people think that this is wrong, but others believe that such work will extend children’s knowledge and increase their sense of responsibility. What is your opinion?
The issue of whether children should replace free time with paid jobs is arousing different opinions. Some people believe that doing paid work could benefit children’s knowledge and foster a sense of responsibility whilst others completely disagree. In my opinion, I believe that working at a young age has its merits and demerits.
On the one hand, many individuals are of the opinion that such work could enhance children’s interpersonal skills and encourage them to be more responsible in life. If children are given opportunity to part-time jobs such as selling coffee or making deliveries, they could better their communication skills by taking orders from customers or driving abilities by delivering goods safely to different locations. Moreover, working part-time could provide children with crucial knowledge when tackling with accidents in the workplace. Since numerous incidents during work cannot be prevented, children need experience from their part-time jobs to be able to face difficulties with ease.
On the other hand, some people are against the idea that children work in their spare time. Firstly, opponents are afraid of labour exploitation as there are some business being accused of exploiting child workers by underpaying and overworking them. Furthermore, some think that children’s safety could not be guaranteed when work accidents happen. For instance, child coffee sellers might injure themselves due to their unfamiliarity with the equipment.
From my perspective, working at a young age could include both advantages and disadvantages as children could both obtain invaluable skills for their future from different jobs and risk their safety because of lack of experience and immaturity.
In conclusion, participating in some paid work not only expands children’s knowledge and increases responsibility, but it could also carry risks of safety and exploitation. Therefore, I think that although children working in spare time has its benefits, its drawbacks are undeniable.
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also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.64473684211 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03607550983 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569078947368 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4093447767 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.571428571 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5714285714 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439701940408 0.244688304435 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171667111882 0.084324248473 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106377987393 0.0667982634062 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258605415473 0.151304729494 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775538688409 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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