In many countries, children participate in some paid work in their spare time. Some people think that this is wrong, but others believe that such work will extend children’s knowledge and increase their sense of responsibility. What is your opinion?
Whether children, in many countries, should replace free time with paid jobs is arousing different opinions. Some people believe that doing paid work could benefit children whilst others completely disagree. In my opinion, I partly believe that working at a young age has its merits and demerits for the juveniles.
On the one hand, many individuals are of the opinion that such work could enhance children’s interpersonal skills and encourage them to be more responsible in life. If children are exposed and given opportunity to a particular part-time job such as selling coffee or shipping, they could better their communication skills by taking orders from customers and driving skills by delivering goods safely to different houses. Moreover, working part-time could provide children with compulsory knowledge when tackling with accidents at work. Since numerous incidents during work are unpreventable, children need experience from their part-time jobs to be able to face difficulties with ease.
On the other hand, some people are against the idea that children should work in their spare time. Firstly, they are afraid of labour exploitation when a child works for a specific business as there are some business being accused of child exploitation by underpaying and overworking children. Furthermore, few people think that children’s safety could not be guaranteed when work accidents happen. For instance, a child coffee sellers are likely to injure themselves due to their infamiliarity with the equipments.
From my point of view, working at a young age could include both advantages and disadvantages as children could both obtain invaluable skills for their future from different jobs and hurt themselves because of experience lack and age barrier.
In conclusion, participating in some paid work not only expands children’s knowledge and increases their future responsibility, but it could also be a risk of safety and exploitation. Therefore, I believe that although children working in free time has its benefits, its drawbacks are undeniable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51886792453 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00285487093 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544025157233 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8660460677 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.357142857 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92857142857 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414219263329 0.244688304435 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170050630026 0.084324248473 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947967954451 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248396780986 0.151304729494 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846136203917 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.