In many countries, many children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people believe that the government has the responsibility to deal with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In light of the inexorably increasing obesity rate and unhealthy habit adoption, some people are of the opinion that the government should be responsible for addressing these alarming situations. While acknowledging the reasons for such a thinking, I would argue that each individual still has an indispensable role to play.
Granted, it is understandable why some advocate the government's intervention in the alleviation of the obesity problem. This is because the government has the power to impose strength in laws and regulations associated with the production and consumption of fast food, which is the main culprit behind the rise in overweight. Aside from this, the states can mount more health-related campaigns on a global scale, thereby nudging people towards adopting healthier lifestyles.
However, it is important to consider the potential impacts of individuals on coping with the rising tendency of being obese. If people were not fully self aware of the detrimental impacts of obesity, the government intervention would be rendered almost futile. Paying little to no attention to the impacts of these problems, people may continue to consume junk food and take no notice of what the government is propagandizing. Given this factor, the belief that individual efforts in reversing the unhealthy lifestyles and the increasing number of obese children seems perfectly justifiable.
In conclusion, while there are justifications for supporting the government’s actions to tackle the increased number of obese and unhealthy people, especially children, I would contend that single efforts from each person is still required to effectively tackle such a dangerous problem, given their self-awareness about obesity and passive habits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 53, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...is understandable why some advocate the governments intervention in the alleviation of the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, still, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63257575758 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17019657906 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613636363636 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.1092159375 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.7 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154634823594 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591070495595 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350336849102 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0895676503251 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214440043243 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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