Some people work harder than others. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative habit?
In a globalized world, some people have a tendency to spend more time and effort working compared to others. In this essay, I would first closely outline several reasons behind this trend before contending that it is a favorable practice, if approached appropriately.
The fact that some people choose to exert themselves more can be ascribed to two primary reasons: the desire for wealth and the duty to bread the family. As for the former, a life without having to worry about money remains a dream of many for ages. In order to realize that dream, significantly more people dedicate themselves to working more. The working practice in Japan perfectly exemplifies this point. Here, people, especially the young, are often reported to take more extra working time, as they could earn more money by doing so. In addition to a hope of becoming rich, the responsibility to care for the family is another reason contributing to the increase in working hours. In fact, the onus to take care of the family are often placed on parents. They, as adults, often feel the need to ensure their children’s lives by providing them with opportunities to learn, live to the fullest, equipping them with everything based on their best ability like others. Working harder is a must to serve this purpose.
After exploring the reasons behind the rise in working time, I would argue that this is a positive habit, if managed approximately. Working for long hours can fulfill not only the wish to be wealthy, but also the responsibility to feed the whole family. However, it is crucial to consider the dire repercussions resulting from this trend. Sitting in front of the computer screens for long hours when working, for example, could lead to deteriorated eyesight, obesity, or even stroke in the worst scenarios. Therefore, balancing between work and physical exercises is required. After spending every one to two hours working, they could do some basic exercise lessons to relax their body, minimizing the risk of getting serious health problems.
In conclusion, I believe that there are two chief rationales for longer working hours, including the fulfillment of wealth and family duty. Moreover, I would contend this is a positive trend, if striking up a balance between work and physical life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'reported taking'.
Suggestion: reported taking
...people, especially the young, are often reported to take more extra working time, as they could ...
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Line 3, column 992, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...bility like others. Working harder is a must to serve this purpose. After exploring...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, as for, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04473684211 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70038855314 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576315789474 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3985426698 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.894736842 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251380357292 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851421323252 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817443614148 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164122725626 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232017419372 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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