In many countries, teenagers are encouraged to do part-time jobs. What’s the situation like in your country? What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of doing part-time jobs?
Part time jobs have become far more popular than it used to be, especially amongst adolescents. In our country it is allowed to do part-time jobs, but only out of the study time. From my point of view, the advantages of doing part-time jobs are improving sense of independence and supporting the family financially and the disadvantages of it is loss of interest to the education.
It is irrefutable that working part-time may have both advantages and disadvantages. Firstly, teenagers can become more independent because they try to do everything by themselves and can learn how to be responsible. Secondly, they gain experience in terms of expending money properly in their basic needs and it is a small financial aid for their parents. Nonetheless, there might be lack of interest to the education due to passion for earning money. For instance, by trying some expensive items teenagers demand for that may improve. They usually get obsessed with earning adequate money for buying a particular product.
Currently in our country there is a big demand for part-time jobs.This is result of not only adolescents independent will but also parents encouragement. Many teenagers are embarrassed to ask money from their parents therefore they prefer to work. This embarrassment might be the cause of shortage of money in the family. Parents want their children to realise the value of the purchased items. After encountering the certain difficulties they start appreciating the hard work. For example, if they buy a computer on their own they are more likely to take a good care of it.
By way of conclusion, in Uzbekistan the attitudes of parents and teenagers towards part-time jobs are almost the same.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1431.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11071428571 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9867031001 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8336347996 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4375 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266262683888 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880448115789 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103614504785 0.0667982634062 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191521391634 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13039617579 0.056905535591 229% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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