In many parts of the world, some famous people are considered ‘role models', and they are having an increasing influence on the young. Is this a positive or negative development?
In contemporary settings, media allows celebrities to access people much more easier than the past. Thus, normal people, especially the young admire many stars and start to folllow their behaviors. Personally, I am of the opinion that this is obviously a positive development.
To begin with, famous people are ideal "role models" for their fans in terms of how to grow up themselfs. They usually appear in public places with not only decent appearance but also smart skills, which helps them to earn the respect from other people. If fans can learn the confidence and the way celebrities take care of themselves to get that good "image", they may have more open oppotunities in their life, namely healthier lifestyles, more social relationships and better career prospects.
More than that, having a model to follow probably helps people to be more orientative. It is not easy to find who oneself truly in this chaotic world. Therefore, well-known people in these cases may help solve the problem. For instance, a teenager who can not figure out their dream job should follow a series of celebrities, from businessmen to artists. When they pay more attention to several specific people because they like the way those famous live, behave and achive, that may lead them to realize their own targets in life.
In summary, striving to get a better lives by following famous people is beneficial to individuals, both the old and the young, since this gives them a better direction in life. Hence, it is recommended that people pick a favourite star and learn a number of positive lessons from them
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...llows celebrities to access people much more easier than the past. Thus, normal people, esp...
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Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...to folllow their behaviors. Personally, I am of the opinion that this is obviousl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in summary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03731343284 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78317191168 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630597014925 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3479832575 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.846153846 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6153846154 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19075202238 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667610210729 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0336856766296 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115442204064 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219835239368 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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