Many people around the world use social media every day to keep in touch with other people and get news events. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In this day and age, using social media platforms to connect to people and around the world and access news has been a prevalent choice for most individuals. From my perspective, the drawbacks of this trend clearly surpass its merits. On the one hand, there are some benefits associated with keeping in touch and reading news over some social platforms. In the past, due to limited mass media, people had to use letters to stay in touch with their relatives or friends and to update the information, they would buy daily newspaper or magazines. However, thanks to technological advances, smartphones and other devices such as tablets, laptops, etc.. have been introduced with various apps to facilitate communication for users, helping them to stay in touch across geographic barriers. For example, my cousin has been studying in England for three years, and he uses Facebook to keep up with his family events and contact with his friends here in Vietnam. As for news consumption, those who have access to social media platforms can instantly update global and local news. For example, a storm called Yagi came to seven different countries in Asia and destroyed all the cities it passed by, so when people there used Zalo or Twitter, they could get immediate news about the process of that storm and its path to prepare for it. On the other hand, using social platforms would have some problematic implications that should receive more attention. Social media is widely popular and can be used anytime if people can access the Internet. Nevertheless, to use those kinds of platforms, they will have to sign up by filling in all their private information including their Gmail accounts and their phone numbers, etc. As a result, if the security is not safe enough, some hackers can get users' information and use that account to deceive users' family, friends or relatives and even use it to blackmail them if they want to get their account back. Besides that, long-term exposure to the screen can cause negative impacts on users' mental health such as anxiety and loneliness, and even result in reduced face-to-face interactions. Concerning news access, if each person is not aware of the situations all happening around them or they do not have knowledge about a specific hot topic, they will be easily influenced by fake news which has not been censored yet, leading to some antisocial behaviors. In conclusion, although it is true that with all cutting edge devices, they can help people to connect to each other immediately and real time updates during major events, I think that the negative aspects outweigh the benefits because it can cause the spread of misinformation, emotional toll and the privacy and security concerns."
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Have
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Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, nevertheless, so, as for, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 10.4138276553 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2279.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 456.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99780701754 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66844696892 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 176.041082164 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550438596491 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.9611220161 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.4375 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296588890425 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940497441871 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690428463341 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.296588890425 0.151304729494 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 78.4519038076 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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