Many people believe that family has a greater influence on a child's life and development compared to other factors, such as friends, TV, music, and so on. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Many people believe that family has a greater impact on the life and growth of a child compared to other factors, such as friends, TV, music, and so on. While there might be some supporting arguments, I still disagree with this view due to more convincing reasons.
On the one hand, this opinion seems reasonable simply many parents could act as a role model for their children. To take Vietnamese parents as an example, they often spend time teaching children. Thus, most children mimic behaviors of their parents. In contrast, some children who do not receive enough attention from parents may fall into social evils.
In spite of the arguments above, I highly go against this view for the following reasons. The first argument is that most children spend more time with their friends in modern society. To illustrate, children who live in urban areas tend to attend boarding schools rather than conventional schools. Hence, they are likely to learn more friends than family members.
Another reason is that children might have greater access to social media. For instance, many young people are addicted to online games as well as social networks. As a result, they follow fashion trends and behavior instead of family members
In conclusion, although I recognize possible arguments to accept the discussed view, there are more convincing reasons to believe this idea is unreasonable
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 242, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, so, still, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1163.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 228.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10087719298 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46911906115 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.640350877193 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 350.1 506.74238477 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.7034939 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4615384615 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5384615385 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7692307692 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226159789942 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746516753899 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115188528675 0.0667982634062 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130552204111 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136953952497 0.056905535591 241% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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