Many people believe that mobile phones cause more harms than the benefits and that’s why mobile phones should be restricted? To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons to support.

Essay topics:

Many people believe that mobile phones cause more harms than the benefits and that’s why mobile phones should be restricted? To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons to support.

Majority of people think that the use of hand sets have brought about more of negative impact rather than what we gain from its use and they also believe it use should be controlled . In my opinion, i strongly agree than mobile phones have been of more positive impact in its use rather than its negative effect and it shouldn't be restricted. This will be explain in my essay with relevant examples.
To begin with,mobile phones has gone a long way to bring distance relationship together. With the use of telephone as a mean of communication among people,individuals can now communicate with one another without seeing themselves. For instance, my husband leaves in another state but myself and the children talk to him any time we want. In addition, its also help to bridge loneliness among friends, who rarely see each other because, they can call and talk to each other when the need arises.
Furthermore, people now attend job interviews without pshyically being there. if an individual is called for job opportunity and he is not close to where the interview will be heard such a person might demand for telephone interview probably if he got the information late.This is also one of the advantages of allowing mobile phones to be use rather than controlling its usage.
To sum up, i agree that mobile phones should be allowed because it has helps in bring families together and it can be use to secure jobs by using it during employment interviews rather than placing a band on it.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, for instance, in addition, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1233.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77906976744 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7411822254 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593023255814 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.9028301306 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.3 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200361887101 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833964646814 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714871836262 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134649614233 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608654188964 0.056905535591 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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